Jerish, Corpse Defiler - ABZAN ZOMBIE COMMANDER!! :D
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Posted on Sept. 23, 2022, 10:14 p.m. by TypicalTimmy
Artwork borrowed from the game Guild Wars 2.
TheOfficialCreator says... #3
The ultimate feels like it could be better, maybe with a bonus of indestructible.
Either way though, Zombie commanders in Orzhov/Abzan are surprisingly few and far between.
September 24, 2022 8:49 a.m.
TypicalTimmy says... #4
Well:
- The -9 takes 2 turns to get,
- is an emblem with two of the most powerful keyword abilities (auto-kill and pushing your life total so high nobody can touch you)
- Supports one of the best "go-wide" as well as "go-tall" tribes in the game, if not the single best one
- Holds amazing synergy with his -X because when the creature ETB it'll be a zombie foe the emblem to copy
- Yields synergy with Parallel Lives, Anointed Procession and all of the other green doublers. As well as Endless Ranks of the Dead and Liliana, the Last Hope
- Speaking of which, he starts at 5 so Doubling Season and Vorinclex, Monsterous Raider kick him off immediately
- Lastly, being an emblem, you could -9 multiple times. Sure Deathtouch and Lifelink won't stack, but the token copying will.
All things considered, being a tribal Commander, being able to utilize it to it's full extent is actually quite powerful.
Although, perhaps giving them +1/+1 would be nice, so if you do get multiple emblems, it'll stack as well.
September 24, 2022 11:28 a.m.
Gidgetimer says... #5
Formatting could use a lot of work, but the idea is cool.
September 25, 2022 8:31 p.m.
TypicalTimmy says... #6
Other than a missed period in the ultimate, the formatting is exactly as other cards are currently printed.
Although the last sentence of the -X could read: "It becomes a black zombie in addition to its other colors and types.", but at this point we are merely shaving off a word or two, and a comma. Not exactly indicative of needing "a lot of work".
September 25, 2022 8:36 p.m. Edited.
Gidgetimer says... #7
First ability should read "... card milled this way..." Oubliette is the only card with the words "in this way" on it and that is because "phases in" was directly beside "this way" on the other 744 cards always say "this way".
Second ability should read "Put target non-artifact creature with mana value X or less from a graveyard on to the battlefield under you control. It's a black Zombie in addition to its other colors and types" to conform with current formatting of abilities of this type. You don't target the player to affect a single card. You target the player when you are affecting all cards in their graveyard or a group of cards in their graveyard.
Third ability should be '... and "Whenever another nontoken Zombie enters the battlefield under your control, create a token that’s a copy of it, except the token isn’t legendary if that Zombie is legendary."' You can literally just copy Miirym's ability and change "Dragon" to "Zombie" to get the correct formatting.
It is "a lot of work" but I didn't want to go into all the mistakes because I like the design. I literally could never design a card in my life. I wasn't trying to criticize the design. I was saying that, to be formatted in a way that would be printed, all of the abilities needed tweaking. The middle one in two places and one of which would actually have mechanical implications.
September 25, 2022 9:30 p.m.
Gidgetimer says... #8
And I messed up the formatting on the second part of the emblem because it isn't on a creature that you don't want to effect, so it shouldn't say "another" it should just say "a". That is what I get for copying from a creature to an emblem without consideration of syntax.
TypicalTimmy says... #2
"Death, is only life, perfected."
"Does a mother not yearn for her child to never hunger? A father concerned about work, without fatigue? To fear disease, famine, disorder and failure. Why become consumed with the shackles of life, when you could be dead, everlasting?"
September 23, 2022 10:34 p.m. Edited.